帮忙看个托福作文~~ 打个分~~Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way for governments to control energy conservation is to raise the prices of gasoline and electricity.Control, the ability or powers to make someone

帮忙看个托福作文~~ 打个分~~Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way for governments to control energy conservation is to raise the prices of gasoline and electricity.Control, the ability or powers to make someone
帮忙看个托福作文~~ 打个分~~
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way for governments to control energy conservation is to raise the prices of gasoline and electricity.
Control, the ability or powers to make someone or something do what you want, which always be used by authority, can’t make people really do the things what the government want. Despite of that some people argue that power can let the people under control, others hold the opposite idea and claim that power will never have a long control to people. in my point of view, the best way for government to conserve the gasoline and electricity can’t be to raise the price. My reasons are explored in detail as following.
The first and fore most reason that government shouldn’t use the tough way to control the energy. In early twentieth century, US government has a clause that banned the wine. That clause caused not only let people who love drinking to go to speakeasies or speaks, but also gave the chance for underworld organization bootlegged the wine to be millinery. There were hundreds of people dead of the underworld organization because the violence was their normal business tool. Until the people lost faith to the government, it abolished the clause. We can imagine that situation that the underworld organization will deal the electricity and gasoline.
Although the society will be mess if the government raises the price of gasoline and electricity, it isn’t the only explanation for government should not use this way to control the energy conservation. People may refuse to pay for the gasoline and electricity so that the electricity and gasoline may be used fro the people but can’t earn any money back which will make the loss of the electricity and gasoline growing more.
Admittedly, the prize can stop some people use electricity and gasoline, however, this way will lose huge amount of gasoline and electricity. In fact, there are really few of people will observe the clause.
To sum up, due to the above mentioned reasons, which sometimes correlate with each other to form and organic whole and thus become more persuasive than any single one of them, we can safely reach the conclusion that the government should not raise the price to control the electricity and gasoline because of the society and the lose of gasoline and electricity.

帮忙看个托福作文~~ 打个分~~Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way for governments to control energy conservation is to raise the prices of gasoline and electricity.Control, the ability or powers to make someone
说实话吧,我觉得最多得3分.
自始至终,我没有看到明确的“为什么不能通过提价来保护能源”,你总是在打擦边球,绕来绕去的,不切题.
第一段的那个举例我看不出来如何与你的论点联系.第二段的解释一是不够详细,二是我不知道该如何理解你的这句话People may refuse to pay for the gasoline and electricity so that the electricity and gasoline may be used fro the people but can’t earn any money back which will make the loss of the electricity and gasoline growing more.
还有一些小的语法拼写错误,单复数啊什么的你自己再查查看.
我想说的是,TOEFL作文要的高分其实不难.你记住两条就可以了.一是切题,二是specific.就是185道基本每道后面都跟有的那句要求.
其实你这道题目完全可以这么分析；
不可以通过提价来保护能源
1.用得起电和车的人都是有钱人,提价对他们来说影响不大；他们甚至有可能飙着用来show身份地位,show他们有钱
2.对那些没有钱的普通百姓来说,提价对他们来说可谓是disaster,扰乱正常生活
3.其实有其他办法啊,比如倡导人们拼车(carpool),节约啊,等等的.
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